One of the things I love about writing is condensing -- getting as much meaning and emotion into as few words as possible. Sometimes it's a pain in the butt (query writing = grr), but once you get it right, a feeling of immense satisfaction sweeps over you. It's one of the emotions that makes it all worthwhile.
Looking back over my old manuscripts/stories, there is one line from one story that always fills me with that shiver of satisfaction. Sure, there are other snippets that make me proud, but reading this one always takes me back to the first moment I wrote it, to that first moment of "Ooo, that's good." It's from my YA romance novel Blind.
Cameron smiled, crossed his arms, and settled in for a long wait. But he never stopped staring at me. Straight into my eyes, never looking away, never blinking for too long. Staring as an aspiring artist stared at the Sistine Chapel. Girls starved themselves to get looked at like that.
With this line, I'd hoped to transmit an instant picture of how Cameron's face looked. That kind of heartbreaking, sweet, dashing look that all girls dream of receiving some day. Do you have a favorite line from your manuscripts? What did you hope it would transmit?